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Character Assassination.


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eye_of_the_wolf

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In one instance he was beautiful, a word not usually associated with the male form but no other could describe him. Eyes shone with the calm and wisdom of the ocean while long blonde hair swaying softly in an imaginary wind. Shadows danced on pale white skin, created by the pure white light that shone from the majestic white wings that were currently curled against his naked back. He was the image of the gods, an angel so pure all before him looked away in shame. Then, in the next instance it all changed. His pale skin darkened to a deadly black, long blonde hair smouldered and fell to the ground in burning clumps. A haunting scream rippled from his cracked and burning lips as his previously toned body became disfigured, giant black claws extending from curled finger tips. White wings shuddered and contorted as black veins crept up like a spreading poison. Then, finally the transformation stopped. Black smouldering eyelids opened slowly, two round fires of fury stared out across the plaza. No longer was he an angel of heaven but a demon of hell. His crime? Falling In love with an undecided.


I could probably do a better job if I had more time to think and plan, this just came out of the top of my head as I went along. But I don't really have much time so it will have to do.

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It's great! No worries there Wolfie.

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Well done! And nice to see you back here.

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There's one wording oddity in the beginning that threw me out of the story, but I assume this is a first draft, so no worries. Your description, however, is aces :thumbsup:

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Everyone seemed to go the beautiful people route. Ugly people need love too. They also need paper bags sunk over their heads to protect our eyes, but I wasn't going to touch on that until later.

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You think demons are beautiful, Antilla??

I like the mention of the black veins growing up the white wings EOTW. Welcome back!

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Well. It's like. You know. I don't know.

Just give me someone not stunning or grotesque. Just ugly. Run-of-the-mill ugly. We need more ugly characters. Someone with crooked teeth. Or crossed eyes. With terrible skin.

People want to read all about that stuff. They just don't know it yet.

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It's the route most authors go in novels for bit parts, if you think about it. Most extras in novels are ass fugly in some kinda way.

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Nice way to come back here swinging, EOTW!



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