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The Orange Blue
Posted 14 October 2008 - 09:27 AM
This is quite simply amazing.
I always forget how much I truly enjoy your writing until I read it again. Then I simultaneously think WANT MORE and how much I hate you for your beautiful sentences.
One question: I can't really tell if the narrator is female or male. I'm inclined to think male just because of the relationship, but in the beginning the narrator snaps gum and adjusts their pony tail. Those are both very feminine things to do. So that makes me feel like it's a girl.
Some gems that deserve repeating:
This is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read in my entire life. no word of a lie.
I marveled at your thin wrists as I spoke. Your bones were like pipettes of glass, blown delicate and fragile. Your ulna and radius had grown hollow like a bird’s. You could fly if you wanted. You could live in the clouds. For you, swimming should have been a breeze.
This is exactly right. You managed to to wrap up all the longing of the narrator for this woman in three tiny sentences that hit you low in the gut.
Close your eyes. Remember it all. Let the moon pull you back.
Excellent job, Trevor. I hate you.
Posted 14 October 2008 - 06:52 PM
I wrote about lesbians. Just because. Actually, this isn't fiction as much as it is an amalgam of letters that I've written to other people. Serena Gatto ... yeah, that's actually Meg Gatto. I didn't find where she lived, but did track down her Myspace. "I'm not sure if I'm in the right place," is the exact thing I said when I first talked to the receptionist entombed inside her glassy cubical at the VCSB. The girl with the hollow bones is real. I used her for the character of Polly in Flutterby, too.
I don't know how to swim.
Posted 14 October 2008 - 06:59 PM
Posted 23 October 2008 - 02:55 PM
I can't even remember before I knew how to swim!