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"The Cheater"


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Richcelt

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The Cheater

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Edited by Richcelt, 16 August 2012 - 07:22 AM.


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Copper

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Very well done, and aptly named.

That guy's a jerk!

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Rachel needs to be shot.

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Nicely done man!

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The guy is most certainly a jerk!

I did like the way you started out making me think that he was cheating on her, then completely threw me off the scent by adding the plagiarism bit in there as well :)

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Really good! Here's how I know a good story ... when a character in it pisses me off like a real person would piss me off. And Cindy really pissed me off. :lol: Okay, okay, Kevin's a cheating dirtbag. Fine. But Cindy doesn't know that, so it doesn't excuse her behavior. She's jumping all down his throat and saying they can't get married if he doesn't get a master's degree? WTF?!?!? I thought marriage was about love, not about accomplishments. Again, this issue is clouded by his dirtbagedness, but I hated Cindy so now I'm all confused. :lol:

Which means you really accomplished what a writer sets out to do, which is paint realistic characters. Kudos!

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The guy is most certainly a jerk!

I did like the way you started out making me think that he was cheating on her, then completely threw me off the scent by adding the plagiarism bit in there as well :)


me too. knowing what the subject has to be about i completely fell for the plagiarism angle and was not expecting the secret lover at all! really good!

its a good thing i have to go to school now or reading the rest of these cheating scumbags would probably warp my mind. :lol:



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